We were in new zelond at nihgt and a hand dropt fome a portal in the sky it landed on Christchurch. He is mand whith fingers whth a malth and with a nose and is eyebraws . kandy kan werld in the sky like a sooper hiroe .and he floo of the building and he ran and he was chasing us and we and we fote that we lost him and he fand us in a alye and we slide daln and ran a wa and we did and did parkor and we was stil chasin us and we made frense. by benedict hayden
Wow, what a great story! The opening sentence is great as it immediately made me think ‘oh how exciting, I wonder why a hand has come down?’
Your use of descriptive language of the character was effective in helping me build a picture in my head of what they look like.
I especially like how in the end everyone made friends because I thought maybe the character chasing them was a bad alien but really he was lovely!
Keep up the good work!